Day 12 #NaPoWriMo

fountain

Photo by: J. Stephen Conn

 

The fountain welcomes strangers with it’s water song.  Weeping cherry trees bloom their white dresses just in time for a wedding as benches whisper stories of first loves and stolen kisses. The maple trees laugh at children playing tag and hiding painted rocks. The sidewalks groan at the thought of a new festival season, but the band stand eagerly awaits the crowded lawn and new talent.

Young grass peeks through mud
a new season of laughter
joy abounds

 

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This is my first attempt at a haibun. Prose it not my strongest form. Posted for NaPoWriMo and d’Verse 

I am open to constructive criticism since this is my first try at a haibun. I know I need improvement so any suggestions and critique on form would be helpful.

 

 

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3 thoughts on “Day 12 #NaPoWriMo

  1. I like this very much! I have to admit that the Haibun is a struggle for me; I don’t enjoy writing prose poetry and I struggle with the Haiku form, so Haibun is my weak point. My favorite teacher of all things Japanese is Frank J. Tassone. https://frankjtassone.com/?wref=bif
    He frequents dVerse and gives gentle help in the form. He has helped me get better at it without beating myself up 🙂 Also, dVerse does a Haibun challenge every other Monday – this coming Monday is the next one. Hope you will stop by! ~Jilly

  2. Pingback: NaPoWriMo / GloPoWriMo 2018 – Day 12 – “Renewal” by David Ellis | toofulltowrite (I've started so I'll finish)

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