I close my eyes. The guilt presses against my skull. Blood pounds the base drum in my ears. I try to breathe, but a noise pulls the trigger and rage convulses out of the monster‘s mouth. Their confusion shines through giant brown mirrors that reflect the ugly creature before them.
tears spill
moments slip away
defeated
hands
press against
my eyes
(breathe)
until the monster
is no longer a giant
and the mirrors reflect
how I want to be
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Erased haibun is a form I learned for #NaPoWriMo.
Submitted for this week’s open link night over at dVerse.
I’ll try my hand at the erased haibun. Loved the poem about unstoppable and probably justifiable rage at presumably the kids’ misdemeanors.
I hope the monsters are only there fore a short time.
So unbelivably raw and powerful! I have goosebumps!
Nice comparison of spilling tears and moments slipping away in the haiku.
Yup. Been there. It’s humiliating when kids bring us down to their level of rage, isn’t it!
I wasn’t always the mom I wanted to be either…those mirror reflections in their eyes says it all.
Awesome. I congratulate you !!
By the way, what rules must a haibun erased? 🤔
So you write a haibun. Then chose words out of it, as many as you want, and create a new poem with it. Here is the prompt I got it from.
http://www.napowrimo.net/day-nineteen-3/